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January 22, 2010 Issue #235
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Welcome!
E-mail is a lot more like speaking than writing. My
experience earlier this week watching an effective
speaker offers some insights into making your
E-Newsletter writing better.
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All the best,

Michael J. Katz
Founder and Chief Penguin
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4 Elements of Better Writing
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It was January 2007, and I was lying in bed, minding
my own business.
My wife Linda and I had just heard a story on the
radio
about the previous day's Martin Luther King, Jr.
holiday. Apparently, cities across the country
were
encouraging residents to make it a day of
volunteerism… "A day on, not a day off."
Linda, being the sort of person who doesn't sit on the
sidelines, leapt out of bed (I'm exaggerating) and
declared, "Our town should do something
like this
next year."
For those of you who've also been married to Linda for
20 years, I'm sure you knew right then that this would
indeed come to pass. And so it did.
Under Linda's guidance, the 2008 kick-off
event
attracted 450 people; the 2009 event, 700
people;
and
this year's event, over 900, all involved in a variety of
service projects. Just to put that into perspective, had
you grown by as much during that same period
of
time, you'd now be 12 feet tall and weigh well over
300
pounds.
Each year's event has included a keynote speaker
– someone charged with getting the volunteers
excited and pumped up before they head off for the
day. It's not an easy assignment, but this year's
speaker – a young teacher named Evren
Gunduz – clearly hit a home run.
It occurred to me later, in fact, as I was busily braiding
yarn into doggie chew toys, that not only could Evren's
name be reconfigured to spell "Vend Zen Guru,"
his
speech contained many of the elements that make for
a well-written E-Newsletter:
- He opened with a story. I know, I
know, your
readers are too busy to read stories; they just want the
facts. That sounds nice, but it's simply not true.
Stories draw people in, stories help people
remember
your message and, perhaps most importantly for
those of us selling high-trust professional services,
stories reveal the people behind the
company.
- He let down his guard. Despite
addressing an
auditorium filled to capacity, Evren immediately
stepped out from behind the safety of the podium and
stood center stage to give his talk. That can be scary,
but it made him seem more accessible.
For business writers, the "podium" tends to be
excessive formality and business speak. It feels
safer
to hide behind tested, stock phrases… even if
they communicate little in the way of genuine thought
and emotion. When you stick to words that actual
humans use, on the other hand – the kind of
words found in real life conversations – you'll
also come across as more accessible.
- He used a prop. After telling the story of
how he
played the trumpet as a kid at a Salvation Army
collection site, Evren put the microphone down on the
stage, stepped briefly behind the curtain and emerged
with his trumpet in hand. Then he played "Amazing
Grace" for the spellbound audience.
Similarly, the "props" in your newsletter are the
interesting, "off topic" things you include in addition to
the expected information. A link to an intriguing
video,
a review of a book you just read, a photo of the soccer
team you coach. Because while few people would
sign up just to receive this random stuff, they
seem to
enjoy these brief (I said brief) side trips which, if done
well, provide yet another opportunity to share some of
yourself with readers.
- He kept it short. The entire speech took
less than
10 minutes. Nobody was checking their watch and
when it was over, you could sense that we all would
have happily stayed for much more of the Evren
Gunduz show.
Good newsletters leave readers with the same
feeling: Long enough to convey a message, but
short
enough so that readers eagerly await the next
installment.
Maybe the most interesting thing about Evren's
speech is that while the audience clearly loved it,
he
didn't actually share that much breakthrough
information. Any number of people could have
communicated the same few ideas; it was his
unique
presentation style that made it captivating and
memorable.
P.S. For a look at Evren's talk (begins at
2:50),
introduced by my lovely wife Linda (back off fellas,
she's taken), follow
this link.
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